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Experiment, part 5

Post by rabid squirrel on Wed Jan 27, 2016 2:45 pm

Feedback and constructive criticism appreciated

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by SethComposerGuy on Wed Jan 27, 2016 3:04 pm

those manuals were great, but it got a little slow paced once you started recycling the lines. Maybe speed him up a bit by layering some acceleration lines on top of each other. I like the penguins at the end, especially the hats, so maybe at the end, have bosh do some continuous looping around one of the penguins with it quoting "I knew all of linerider revolves around me." Finally, I really like the sound effects, and I think you could even add some nice harp music to it to lighten the mood up even more.

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Chuggers on Wed Jan 27, 2016 3:24 pm

i like how the ending was an illusion multiple times

your flings are a little dainty, how about manning them up? I think muscles would suffice
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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by anton on Wed Jan 27, 2016 4:58 pm

digging the bing boing section. I'd suggest making it bigger.

Also, recylces were good, but took too much time.

You should sync your next track to your favorite song

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Rafael on Wed Jan 27, 2016 5:38 pm

Nice job rabid. I liked the way you drew the lines. I think you should sync the rotation of the flow to the track more. Overall I must say this is a pretty good track.
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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by ScrungleBlumpkus on Wed Jan 27, 2016 9:02 pm

rafael wins. you should sync the flow to the rhythm to the groove to the smoove to the pace to the rotation to the sync of the motions, y'know





Also I feel like you didn't even make these and that it is actually you're exoerunent with what people think when somebody just suddenly starts making tracks completely unlike them in a very short amount of time? Don't you think maybe it's because somebody else made them and he stole them/asked to do this experiment :p (and of course you probably did some editing too. You just wanted to release a bucnh of old tracks in a new and interesting and creative way, recycling them artistically from history? idk

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Fauxfyre on Wed Jan 27, 2016 9:41 pm

I see you took the feedback to make an all boing bong section.

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Conundrumer on Wed Jan 27, 2016 10:23 pm

i dont think the labels should exist alone. i think the penguins should be saying the trick names and pointing at bosh

ensure their headgears are unique

also, jumping on top of the harp music suggestion, during very slow sections, add back in the death metal until it speeds up again. make sure to indicate that norbi has visited the very slow sections

finally, when bosh jumps over gaps, make it so that bosh is jumping over a big fish attempting to eat him


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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Fauxfyre on Wed Jan 27, 2016 10:24 pm

@Conundrumer wrote:i dont think the labels should exist alone.
https://vid.me/rJoJ

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Sheldon on Wed Jan 27, 2016 10:34 pm

too slow make it highspeed
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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Yobanjojoe on Thu Jan 28, 2016 6:09 am

draw the mummy from breathtaking silence line for line

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by Z_N-Freak on Thu Jan 28, 2016 10:02 am

I like the idea of penguins saying the trick names (rather than there just to be letters). I liked the fake ending, but the recycling was too slow. At times I wasn't even sure if Bosh was moving or standing still, which was a bit boring. The boing boing and fling parts were really cool. I also like the long nose manual where he doesn't have his hands in front, those are harder to balance, cool stuff Smile

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Re: Experiment, part 5

Post by ScrungleBlumpkus on Thu Jan 28, 2016 10:10 am

directly copy the line data for a dense quirk (like my gigastacks track?) byte for byte and inject the info into the next track you make, and if you have to do it with green lines so it doesn't overlap with the track

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