Fire and Ice-JLFlame2000

Okay here is the deal.I've had this up for a while but I finally my acount on this website.I know my recording sucks.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dMzXi_BM5Q8&feature=channel_video_title
Thanks for watching!

My recording is worse than yours..haha
Hey and that's a pretty good track for a first release, just try to make more manuals at first

I usually don't comment on begginer-level tracks because I tend to (apparently) discourage new riders, but I'll try to be nice.

I would first like to point out that it is much better than my first release, and you definitely had some good inspirations up there (I'll highlight Inu and Kramwood).

I will say that your curves in general need some work, and that can be acheived in the simple form of using more lines and making them smaller, and zooming out frequently to have a look at the bigger picture. Sometimes it may look smooth zoomed in but it's actually not. And of course, let Bosh ride through it so you can see how ridable it is.

I really loved that you had some squishies in there, as weak as they may have been, but as a general rule of thumb, I will suggest you drop the head-riding until you get the basic manuals down and are ready to move on to some occasional head manuals, which shouldn't be used frequently at all, ever.

And as a final note... "JLflame2000 presents his first line rider track," "a line rider track" just didn't work. A little more attention next time would be nice.


That's pretty much it, please try not to take it 100% negatively. =P

okay i know about the "a linerider track" I noticed it right after i posted it.