Black - Dawn

I know title is total uncreative ^^


Ok this is my first track
Hope you enjoy it...

That was really fun! It just got better and better. Also, for this being your first release, some of those flings were really impressive.

I see that you also have the basics of manuals down, but here's a tip if you want to improve them: Try to have equal pressure/as much pressure as you can in a manual. That basically means that you should make the force of the sled against the lines equal all the way through.

I see a lot of potential

That was your first track WHAT!? Stop Joking.If That's you first track then I'm crazy.I guess some tips would be to work on the flow.One example would be at :37.He was at that one spot way too long.But I'm not going to criticize too much.... First track...

You are amazing. Those flings, how did you learn them so fast? Just work on your manual pressure and circularity.

Oh wow.

It wasn't your first track.

Maybe your first track that you released, but it's not your first track.

Lankher wrote:It wasn't your first track.

Maybe your first track that you released, but it's not your first track.

True, i've played line rider befor 2 years awhile. So when i started again i have knowen some tricks like manual, Gravity well, anti gravity well and other things.
At the beginning of the track i've never understand how a fling works, but after i watched some sol. and used cheat engine for slomo (Flings weren't really hard now)

Wow, you really see a lot of evolution throughout this track o_O. I enjoyed it a lot. The song fit really, really well!
I'd like to add something to Cereal's criticism:
Try to make the nose go slightly through the line. That is the strongest a manual can be. You can't always do this but you should aim for that. Also, when the hands are divided (like on 0:50) it's pretty much impossible to make a perfectly smooth nose manual. Try to avoid that by using a hand well or something like that.
Also, try to make your wells as strong as possible, this might help you with that.
Keep playing man!

1:23 - 1:33 holy sh-

for a first released track, that was outstanding sir. I saw some amazing improvement thar, and I hope to see more.

First track?!
My God, that was amazing ^^
You really did get so much better as the track went on. At the start I was thinking "This guy is REALLY good for his first track" Then as it went further I was thinking "Holy shiii-" Your quirks became pretty fantastic and your manuals became much better too!
I am really impressed with what you did, the track was actually a long one, the evolution and progression of your tricks and skill made the video much more enjoyable.
I really hope to see more from you in the future, fantastic work ^^

Hmm... I feel aspi33/scg in that track..

It is good to see your doing different styles then what you usually do.

This really makes me depressed.

1:23-1:33 is probably 5x as good as anything I could do, and it's his/her first track.....While I've been playing for 4 years...

WTB wrote:This really makes me depressed.

1:23-1:33 is probably 5x as good as anything I could do, and it's his/her first track.....While I've been playing for 4 years...

it kinda looks similar to aspi and stuff, but it's actually kind of sloppy in comparison. It's there but not really necessary, and doesn't affect his movement much more than a normal flings

My advice would be to watch MrZNF's and anomaly76's videos. They're really excellent and have really shaped trackmaking more than anyone else.

ignoring the first track blatant lie, this was awesome. Nice

I think i'm learning really fast(thanks TASing for the patience and smartness), but i have problems with shoulder fling, foot and tail fling

Hmm. Keep your flings long enough so that they don't shift. I'm fine with constant chains (I do that a lot) but make sure it doesn't wobble during a fling.

Second, put the most power into flings that you can. Long lines do put in power sometimes, but distance between lines (as in up and down, not far apart) will also work. I think someone names Hkay made a well stacking tutorial that showed what to do. It's available on YouTube.

Take advantage of your ability to zoom in! Press Shift+Move your mous upwards to get it to zoom in really far. Then you could smooth out your manuals and make sure that they are nice and even.

Other than hat, awesome work! Great first and second official LR video you have there, and I wish you luck in the future.

If you ever get frustrated with LR, take a quick break. It never hurts to do so.

invers hand flying in your first track !! awesome
I envy you very much, I've never been good at trackmaking^^ nice work

HG42 wrote:I think someone names Hkay made a well stacking tutorial that showed what to do. It's available on YouTube.

That would be Chui Ninji, actually.

@ the track, great job! I'm really impressed. Especially at your preview. I just know you're gonna be outstanding at LR.

Also, yay, another German/Swiss/Austrian guy

Just looked at the preview and... you're improving REALLY fast. Just try to work on making flings and such look clean and try to avoid stacking if possible.

Orthuss wrote:

HG42 wrote:I think someone names Hkay made a well stacking tutorial that showed what to do. It's available on YouTube.

That would be Chui Ninji, actually.

@ the track, great job! I'm really impressed. Especially at your preview. I just know you're gonna be outstanding at LR.

Also, yay, another German/Swiss/Austrian guy

Totally thought someone was using {username} until I quoted it.

Dawn, the last thing you did in Nicht gelistet, the slomo part... If you're gonna do something like that, and you want to keep your speed, turn your wells the other direction. It makes it a bit awkward to get the well, but it speeds Bosh up, instead of slowing him down. Kind of the same logic behind alt flings.

Aside from the whole "first track" shenanigan, I like them both a lot. You have a lot of potential.