Experiment, part 2
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Experiment, part 2
Feedback and constructive criticism appreciated
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nw0-eOvV27I
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nw0-eOvV27I
Re: Experiment, part 2
Okay, first of all, I really, really like this idea and where it's going. Not quite a fan of tracks where he dies at the end, unless there's a specific reason for him to do so (ex: Eden 2). The extra power you gave him provided a lot in terms of giving the track direction, which I feel might have been something the previous one lacked.
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Re: Experiment, part 2
I think, to make this track have more of an emotional "stick," I would have recommended the following:
> Slow zoom in on bosh as he dies.
> A single, animated tear flowing sadly down his cheek.
> A voiceover in which Bosh recalls the halcyon days of his youth in a wistful yet simultaneously dignified manner.
> Sync to the flow.
> Slow zoom in on bosh as he dies.
> A single, animated tear flowing sadly down his cheek.
> A voiceover in which Bosh recalls the halcyon days of his youth in a wistful yet simultaneously dignified manner.
> Sync to the flow.
OTDE- Administrator
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Re: Experiment, part 2
I thought the ending was funny!
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Re: Experiment, part 2
More scenery less curves, and more stalls. Also, incorporate some kramuals. And a monument, preferably a penguin.
Re: Experiment, part 2
I think it would be cool if at the end bosh oscillated between two or more "stall" areas instead of him sticking to one spot
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