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Paradox - Opal

Post by Opal Rider on Sun Mar 18, 2012 4:26 pm

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w7USjHy8Vus

This, is my ToC4 entry. I'm just a tiiiny bit happy the way this turned out. xD


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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by OTDE on Sun Mar 18, 2012 4:40 pm

Whoa, that was awesome. I enjoyed the way you integrate Smile
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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by Chuggers on Sun Mar 18, 2012 4:47 pm

nice job on all blue! Very Happy
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Post by weebit on Sun Mar 18, 2012 4:51 pm

OOOOH Me likey
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Post by Opal Rider on Sun Mar 18, 2012 5:22 pm

In depth reviews are always welcome. Very Happy .... *cough cough*. But no, really. I'd like to know your dislikes as well as what you thought was good.

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by RyderLR on Sun Mar 18, 2012 5:58 pm

I thought that was awesome and really enjoyed it but only 50 seconds? waahhhh I was just starting to love it Very Happy

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by Rafael on Sun Mar 18, 2012 6:14 pm

Aw, short Sad.
Great job on the all blue part. It was really enjoyable throughout the entire track. I was kinda sad when it was over.. Good blue manuals. Didn't realize it was all blue until it was finished (even though I read the description before xD).
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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by Ph0enix on Sun Mar 18, 2012 6:27 pm

Why must you be soooooo much better at all blue manuals than me. :|

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by Opal Rider on Sun Mar 18, 2012 7:43 pm

xD Yeah, I started to get fed up with all blue towards the end. Also, thanks to my girlfriend for making the first well of the fling @:23.

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by Cereal on Sun Mar 18, 2012 8:19 pm

Everything was great besides that first well of the fling @ 0:23. (Seriously, what were you thinking thar? :|)

But in all seriousness, it was a surprise to me that it was all blue! You also seem to have a really good feel for flow. That part near the end reminds me of Instinct's style a bit.

It was definitely on the short side, but enjoyable nonetheless. Wink

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by efrazable on Sun Mar 18, 2012 9:01 pm

@Opal Rider wrote: Yeah, I started to get fed up with all blue towards the end. Also, thanks to my girlfriend for making the first well of the fling @:23.
IT'S A COLLAB! CAN'T BE ENTERED IN TOC! :| :| :| :| RAGE :|

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by Opal Rider on Sun Mar 18, 2012 9:29 pm

@efrazable wrote:
@Opal Rider wrote: Yeah, I started to get fed up with all blue towards the end. Also, thanks to my girlfriend for making the first well of the fling @:23.
IT'S A COLLAB! CAN'T BE ENTERED IN TOC! :| :| :| :| RAGE :|

Oshi- D: .

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by chaomocha on Sun Mar 18, 2012 10:20 pm

HA ^

really liked your pinches, those were very smooth and well made. all in all a good track, keep it up!

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by WishLine on Mon Mar 19, 2012 2:23 pm

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Re: Paradox - Opal

Post by Chui Ninji on Sat Mar 24, 2012 5:09 pm

I wish it was longer. It felt kinda...unfinished. And I was expecting more manuals and less quirk/flatsled. I liked that little part after the pinch though. Kinda wish you made it longer. xD I wouldn't be totally opposed to you revisiting this and extending it.

Also...animusic. 8D

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