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Post by RyderLR on Mon Mar 12, 2012 4:51 pm


Link: RosED

Wiibit made the track, I made the scenery, named RosED because it is all RED and because of the monument

Thanks to Kramwood for recording and editing, special thanks to Chuggers for recording also.

Enjoy! Please give me criticism on my scenery, looking to improve!



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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Chuggers on Mon Mar 12, 2012 4:54 pm

shoulda used my recordings Hehe


I liked the flower at the end, and the rest was cool too.

As for the track, maybe work on minimizing head-riding making some of the recycles better.

I give it a 5 out of 10 (whatacoolgradingsystem)
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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by WishLine on Mon Mar 12, 2012 5:03 pm

Well, given how difficult it is to make all red work, I think this is really good. The scenery was simplistic, but effective...but then I saw the rose, which really is a powerful monument. All in all, I like this little surge in small scenery tracks and hope you guys enjoyed making it! Smile

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by weebit on Mon Mar 12, 2012 5:14 pm

Wow, Ryder, that was my first time seeing all of the scenery. And for your first time scening that was pretty freaking awesome.
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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Traxis on Mon Mar 12, 2012 5:37 pm

Honestly, probably one of my favourites to watch lately. No, it wasn't the best quick, high speed manual that everyone tries for, but it was a fun track that had some awesome, well done, yet somewhat simplistic (except the rose) scenery. Great job guys.

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Cereal on Mon Mar 12, 2012 5:46 pm

@Traxis wrote:Honestly, probably one of my favourites to watch lately. No, it wasn't the best quick, high speed manual that everyone tries for, but it was a fun track that had some awesome, well done, yet somewhat simplistic (except the rose) scenery. Great job guys.

What? Everyone tries for high speed manuals? You best be smokin' dat herb mayne.

Scenery was consistant, and it has a nice monument. I got a strong "Hillz" vibe from it.

'Twas an enjoable micro-scenery track. Thumbs Up

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Traxis on Mon Mar 12, 2012 5:52 pm

@Cereal wrote:
@Traxis wrote:Honestly, probably one of my favourites to watch lately. No, it wasn't the best quick, high speed manual that everyone tries for, but it was a fun track that had some awesome, well done, yet somewhat simplistic (except the rose) scenery. Great job guys.

What? Everyone tries for high speed manuals? You best be smokin' dat herb mayne.

No, I mean that it seems every track is really fast manuals and quirks, it's never a nice calm track that has smooth flow to it. Yes I realize quirks have flow and stuff, but it's not majestic.

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Wolf_Spirit on Mon Mar 12, 2012 6:07 pm

I really liked it ^^
The simple scenery looked really great, though when scening, I would avoid him riding inside objects like at 0:36.
The ending monument was really impressive! Fantastic job man Very Happy

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by RyderLR on Mon Mar 12, 2012 7:48 pm

Thanks for all the feedback guys! and yeah Wolf, that looked bad D:

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Stallie on Mon Mar 12, 2012 8:51 pm

That reminded me of hillz by ZNF and mhenr18. That scenery was pretty cool and the track was nice as well, you guys did a pretty good job. Smile
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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Yobanjojoe on Tue Mar 13, 2012 1:57 am

I liked it alot, however those lines that were on the inside of the lines representing the hills could have been a bit beater.

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by TigerXLine on Mon Mar 19, 2012 8:01 pm

This was quite a nice scenery, I must say.......... what? Can't a ex-linerider judge on these days standards?
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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by OTDE on Mon Mar 19, 2012 11:40 pm

@Traxis wrote:
@Cereal wrote:
@Traxis wrote:Honestly, probably one of my favourites to watch lately. No, it wasn't the best quick, high speed manual that everyone tries for, but it was a fun track that had some awesome, well done, yet somewhat simplistic (except the rose) scenery. Great job guys.

What? Everyone tries for high speed manuals? You best be smokin' dat herb mayne.

No, I mean that it seems every track is really fast manuals and quirks, it's never a nice calm track that has smooth flow to it. Yes I realize quirks have flow and stuff, but it's not majestic.

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Guest on Tue Mar 20, 2012 10:52 am

@TigerXLine wrote:This was quite a nice scenery, I must say.......... what? Can't a ex-linerider judge on these days standards?


Oh hey I was wondering where you went xD

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by WishLine on Tue Mar 20, 2012 2:31 pm

I hope you won't mind if I use my system on here as well, to see how it handles your tracks Smile

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Section 1 – Track Creation (2 Points out of a possible 5)
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Track had suitable titles and credits = +1
Track had fitting music = +1
Track had a special feature (all blue, all red, a plot, special editing, music syncing, super-long) = +2
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Section 2 – Track Progression (6 Points out of a possible 10)
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Track had quite smooth curves = +1 –OR– Track had very smooth curves = +2
Track moved left as well as right = +1
Track moved up as well as down = +1
This track had some sort of basic flip or loop-the-loop = +1

Track had a good pace = +1 –OR– Track had an extremely fast pace = +2
Track flowed nicely = +1 –OR– Track flowed extremely well = +3
Section 3 – Manuals (13 Points out of a possible 15)
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Track had nose manuals = +1
Track had tail manuals = +2
Track had head manuals = +2

The track executed a manual loop = +3
Track was >50% manuals = +3 –OR– This track was primarily a manual track = +5
Some of these manuals could be regarded as ‘high-speed’ = +2
Section 4 – Quirks (2 Points out of a possible 20)
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This track had gravity wells = +2
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This track had flings = +2
These flings were varied, long and impressive = +3
This track had a special manual (granual, flanual, Kramual etc) = +3
This track was primarily a quirk track = +5
Section 5 – Track Beginning and Ending (3 Points out of a possible 5)
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Track started at a good speed = +1
Track ended with a good or funny crash = +1 –OR– Track ended with a good standstill = +2
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Section 6 – Scenery (11 Points out of a possible 25)
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Track attempted some scenery = +1 –OR– Entire track was scened = +3
Scenery was consistent and realistic = +3 –OR– Scenery was abstract and entertaining +3
Scenery used good shading = +2
Scenery did not leave unattractive white space = +2
Scenery had a good monument = +3 –OR– Scenery had several good or one exceptional moment = +5
Scenery had impressive detail = +5 –OR– Scenery had stunning detail = +10
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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Pinter on Tue Mar 20, 2012 2:36 pm

I think section 7 is right :|

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by RyderLR on Tue Mar 20, 2012 5:39 pm

The system is out of whack, if there is one fling, then quirk gets like a 3, thanks for the review but no thanks :| 8D

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by WishLine on Tue Mar 20, 2012 5:42 pm

ryderofthelines wrote:The system is out of whack, if there is one fling, then quirk gets like a 3, thanks for the review but no thanks :| 8D

I've got some ideas on how to get this sorted. I rated bolted to the wall, one of my favourite tracks, and it only got 85% for not having enough quirk in it. I'll devise a better system soon!

Thanks for your patience :P

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by RyderLR on Tue Mar 20, 2012 5:48 pm

sorry for saying this again xD you already saw my last comment on it, thought you didn't D: but okay

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by rich on Wed Mar 21, 2012 1:09 am

Very cool, I really liked it. Great job with the main part of the flower thing, what ever they call it.
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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Traxis on Wed Mar 21, 2012 1:16 am

Wish, grade tracks on their type. Don't assume every track has manuals, quirk, and scenery. Have a quirk rating, normal manuals rating and scenes rating, or something similar

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by Guest on Wed Mar 21, 2012 8:34 am

@WishLine wrote:I hope you won't mind if I use my system on here as well, to see how it handles your tracks Smile

WishLine track rating system
Section 1 – Track Creation (2 Points out of a possible 5)
Spoiler:
Track had suitable titles and credits = +1
Track had fitting music = +1
Track had a special feature (all blue, all red, a plot, special editing, music syncing, super-long) = +2
Track was >1 minute in length = +1
Section 2 – Track Progression (6 Points out of a possible 10)
Spoiler:
Track had quite smooth curves = +1 –OR– Track had very smooth curves = +2
Track moved left as well as right = +1
Track moved up as well as down = +1
This track had some sort of basic flip or loop-the-loop = +1

Track had a good pace = +1 –OR– Track had an extremely fast pace = +2
Track flowed nicely = +1 –OR– Track flowed extremely well = +3
Section 3 – Manuals (13 Points out of a possible 15)
Spoiler:
Track had nose manuals = +1
Track had tail manuals = +2
Track had head manuals = +2

The track executed a manual loop = +3
Track was >50% manuals = +3 –OR– This track was primarily a manual track = +5
Some of these manuals could be regarded as ‘high-speed’ = +2
Section 4 – Quirks (2 Points out of a possible 20)
Spoiler:
This track had gravity wells = +2
Some of these wells were in lengthy chains = +2
Some of these made a loop or spiral = +3
This track had flings = +2
These flings were varied, long and impressive = +3
This track had a special manual (granual, flanual, Kramual etc) = +3
This track was primarily a quirk track = +5
Section 5 – Track Beginning and Ending (3 Points out of a possible 5)
Spoiler:
Track started at a good speed = +1
Track ended with a good or funny crash = +1 –OR– Track ended with a good standstill = +2
–OR– Track ended with a recognised stall = +4
Section 6 – Scenery (11 Points out of a possible 25)
Spoiler:
Track attempted some scenery = +1 –OR– Entire track was scened = +3
Scenery was consistent and realistic = +3 –OR– Scenery was abstract and entertaining +3
Scenery used good shading = +2
Scenery did not leave unattractive white space = +2
Scenery had a good monument = +3 –OR– Scenery had several good or one exceptional moment = +5
Scenery had impressive detail = +5 –OR– Scenery had stunning detail = +10
Section 7 – Track entertainment value and comments (10 Points out of a possible 20)
Spoiler:
A basic score out of twenty to illustrate the author’s personal enjoyment of this track = 10
Comments: I'm not happy with your score as I see it. Because I actually think you were too heavily slammed for not being filled with massive amounts of quirks. You lost five points for simply not being a quirk track. I think I've got some thinking to do. What do you think? Smile
Scoring
Scened = 47/100
Naked = N/A/75
Final Score = 47%
Score-aid
Spoiler:
Below 20% = Newbie
20-29% = Emerging
30-39% = Average
40-49% = Decent
50-59% = Good
60-69% = Great
70=79% = Excellent
80-89% = Supreme
Over 90% = Epic

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by rabid squirrel on Wed Mar 21, 2012 4:59 pm

:|

just because of wish's post I'm giving this review using my scenery criteria.

Ambitious? nope (though that's fine)
Epic factor/Impressive? nope
Complete/Cohesive? yes
Vision? somewhat. rose felt a little bit like an afterthought
An Experience? meh, maybe

Quality of art? rose was great, rest was meh
Creativity in scening things? could be better. except for the rose the track seemed rather bland/monotonous/formulaic
Speed manipulations? none
Detail? rose - good. rest - meh
Consistency? yes
Unified Theme? yes
Originality? ehh, not really
Speed? decent

Monument placement? good
Monument usage? fine
3-D (extrusion, adding shine, shading, contour lines, adding depth)? a little bit of depth. not bad.
Made sense? mostly
"Hiding" the track? (this is bad) none! (this is good)
Good Ending? yep

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by WishLine on Wed Mar 21, 2012 5:00 pm

@rabid squirrel wrote::|

just because of wish's post I'm giving this review using my scenery criteria.

Ambitious? nope (though that's fine)
Epic factor/Impressive? nope
Complete/Cohesive? yes
Vision? somewhat. rose felt a little bit like an afterthought
An Experience? meh, maybe

Quality of art? rose was great, rest was meh
Creativity in scening things? could be better. except for the rose the track seemed rather bland/monotonous/formulaic
Speed manipulations? none
Detail? meh
Consistency? yes
Unified Theme? yes
Originality? ehh, not really
Speed? decent

Monument placement? good
Monument usage? fine
3-D (extrusion, adding shine, shading, contour lines, adding depth)? a little bit of depth. not bad.
Made sense? mostly
"Hiding" the track? (this is bad) none! (this is good)
Good Ending? yep

Rabid, I kind of get the feeling I've offended some sort of artistic sense in you by trying to do a rating system? :P

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Re: RosED Scenery short

Post by RyderLR on Wed Mar 21, 2012 5:21 pm

Why does this have so many posts o.O it was a simplistic scenery track of only thirty seconds xD

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