Glare Maul by Pinter

Hello everyone..

i'm new on this forums, this is my first post
So, I made a track, and I want some critism of you..

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zjx0hV1Wm1w

Also watch my other video's to see that i improved my track making a lot


See ya
Mart


EDIT:
The track without audio: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KsxyzSZWRdY&feature=youtube_gdata

if it's your first track this is very great !! smoothie curves and some g well using

not my first track, .. it's the fourth on youtube i think, i have 1 naked track, 1 scened not manual, 1 scened manual and 1 halfdone scened manual on youtube

Edit: I have 2 fully granual scenery tracks on youtube now

I believe your Dutch! Me too! Welcome to the club (Rafael, me, h4x0r, Koala, and probably some others)

I liked your scenery very much. Watch some scened tracks, but be sure your progress in the ability of creating your own style, because I saw very much influences of others in this track.

Nevertheless, great scenery. Work on your track though (manual pressure, speed, flow, circularity, etc., watch some tutorials of them too or watch Cereal's tracks, and never give up practising on them!).

Haha, thnx for welcoming and , yeah I am I've watched a lot of tracks and tut's and i see myself improve ..

And i've watched allready some of Cereal tracks. But thanks for the comment of making my own style, i don't want to be a stealer :$

I laughed out loud at the sign pointing to blank space that said "Nothing!"

The scenery was well-done, especially for a new player! (if you don't mind me saying that) Nice manuals and gravity wells, too. I see a lot of potential in you; keep it up!

Watch some scened tracks, but be sure your progress in the ability of creating your own style, because I saw very much influences of others in this track.

I have to agree with this.

I agree that you agree

And yeah, i am a new player, so you can call me like that

Can you upload it to something else than YT? cant watch it due to copyright [censored]

That was great for a new player!

My advice would be 1) think of a theme for your track instead of just drawing stuff 2) try not to copy other scenery so openly, be sneakier lol 3) start thinking about keeping the track fast paced and interesting - I'd much rather watch a fast-paced interesting flatsled track than a slow boring manual track

Hope to see more from you!

Dude that scenery was sexy! Welcome to the forums. The track was a little slow, and mostly went downhill, but the curves were smooth, the scenery reminded me of sorvius, and in my mind it was all around epic. amazing work.

EDIT: also, if you learn from other people's tracks, it's not stealing. Every track is different. By taking moves from one you see on youtube you're just taking what people found out and putting it into your own words. politicians do it all the time

Rapto wrote:Can you upload it to something else than YT? cant watch it due to copyright [censored]

Oh allright, i'm gona upload it tonight without music..

Rapto wrote:Can you upload it to something else than YT? cant watch it due to copyright [censored]

then watch it with proxy...

rabid squirrel wrote:That was great for a new player!

My advice would be 1) think of a theme for your track instead of just drawing stuff 2) try not to copy other scenery so openly, be sneakier lol 3) start thinking about keeping the track fast paced and interesting - I'd much rather watch a fast-paced interesting flatsled track than a slow boring manual track

Hope to see more from you!

I didn't really see any styles from other people, except

he who must not be named:

Holy crap, Sssschiller, your avatar is creepy!

a1c4s8 wrote:I didn't really see any styles from other people, except

he who must not be named:

well there was definitely some Sorvius in there, there actually wasn't a whole lot of TD that I could see

Watch "Make Believe", and you'll see the hills.
EDIT: Lol I didn't even notice the bricks..

Wow, very impressive!
First of all, welcome to the forums, hope you enjoy it here ^^
You have a great potential in scenery, what you did looked great! For improvements I'd say pretty much what rabid did, so best of luck with your next track

wow, thnx all

welcome on this forum!!!

awsom scenery and manuals, but make it faster on your next track

i'm working on it