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Post by Apple Mon Jun 20, 2016 3:14 pm

I'm working on two big projects right now and this was more or less filler to take my mind off of the other two.



Link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BMu9miQjACM
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Post by Chuggers Mon Jun 20, 2016 3:31 pm

love how misdirectional it is, but i think the track could have benefited from more coherently flowy movement
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Post by OTDE Tue Jun 21, 2016 1:01 am

I actually like that it isn't flowy in this particular case: it's got that sort of lumbering feel that matches the slow, downtempo-ey jazz that you used. I do agree about the coherency, though—there wasn't enough lumbering to convince me that it was totally intentional.

I enjoyed the bits where you played around with chains. I'm interested to see where people take that.

Fun track, lots of cool ideas, I look forward to your two big projects Smile
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Post by Z_N-Freak Tue Jun 21, 2016 5:14 am

To me it was quite flowy and jazzy and very relaxing. Really liked it Smile
Looking forward to the release of your big projects!
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Post by Lukking Tue Jun 21, 2016 11:06 am

i want the well tempered gravity well!
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Post by rabid squirrel Tue Jun 21, 2016 2:46 pm

Chuggers wrote:i think the track could have benefited from more coherently flowy movement
Would I be wrong to call this a pretentious comment?

I don't understand how this track was lacking in the realm of coherence, flow, or movement.
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Post by Chuggers Tue Jun 21, 2016 3:57 pm

rabid squirrel wrote:
Chuggers wrote:i think the track could have benefited from more coherently flowy movement
Would I be wrong to call this a pretentious comment?

I don't understand how this track was lacking in the realm of coherence, flow, or movement.

giving constructive criticism is not pretentious

bosh's movement has seemingly no purpose.  The track itself seems to want to be misdirectional, and a lot of the jerks that lead to the misdirection are pretty well done, but what is in-between the jerks lacks the smooth movement that would have amplified the misdirectional movement.  What is in-between the jerks looks haphazardly made; understandable because of how dense the track is, but the extra effort may have made the finished product pop more.
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Post by rabid squirrel Wed Jun 22, 2016 12:37 am

criticism like what you posted in response is constructive. Saying obtuse phrases like "coherently flowy movement" without any elaboration is not.

(I think I will decline to comment on your elaboration if that is okay)
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Post by Apple Wed Jun 22, 2016 7:55 am

Thanks for the input guys. I agree that it needs to be a little smoother in places and I'm going to try and work on that.
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Post by Chuggers Wed Jun 22, 2016 11:09 am

rabid squirrel wrote:criticism like what you posted in response is constructive. Saying obtuse phrases like "coherently flowy movement" without any elaboration is not.

youre probably right, I'll try to elaborate as much as I can from now on
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Post by rabid squirrel Wed Jun 22, 2016 12:49 pm

Chuggers wrote:
rabid squirrel wrote:criticism like what you posted in response is constructive. Saying obtuse phrases like "coherently flowy movement" without any elaboration is not.

youre probably right, I'll try to elaborate as much as I can from now on
chuggers, you rock.
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