HP - The Rude Awakening

*flashback*

I'm in my bed, thinking about quirk. No, no, NO! I don't want to become a wanderer in a world where the boundaries are in sight. I did not know that Fate had already decided. I closed my eyes. ''Tomorrow's another day.''

''You've been in suspension for 108 days.'' Wait, wut? I felt a mighty slap on my cheek. ''I normally don't slap people, but hey, you looked dead fo' sure mate!''. I opened my eyes... The sun. So there's light at... some other side after all. This strange man offered me his hand. Sure. Let's see where I am.



This was originally Eden's beginning, but I lost a part so I was like: [Censored] this, and here it is. My most crappy track.

That was boss! I think the XY could have used more airtime, tbh. Loved the G-Rollin'!

I can tell that you're constantly going to be half a step ahead of me in quirk.

XY was the best part, and the rest was... adequate. Very skilled quirky tricks, but the track lacked airtime and flow.

Your manuals could also use some work, but overall, your fling/alt fling skills are above the norm!

Dude, really, crappy, this was awesome, I thought the xy was the best part of the track, and that one g roll after the xy, that was pretty awesome, nice job.

I thought it was lovely.

Dude, not bad at all! Bit short, but excellent while it lasted.

that was GREAT!!

as for some constructive criticism, try to include more rotation in your quirk, that should help a lot xp

that was preetty good

Rotation at 0:53 = Boss

The xy was the best. I know you can make better quirk though.

smokin i loved it

I remember when you used to be just a bit better than me. I will catch up, though. I promise.

efrazable wrote:That was boss! I think the XY could have used more airtime, tbh. Loved the G-Rollin'!

I personally thought the g-rolling was odd and didn't fit the track, but oh well.

Cereal wrote:XY was the best part, and the rest was... adequate. Very skilled quirky tricks, but the track lacked airtime and flow.

Your manuals could also use some work, but overall, your fling/alt fling skills are above the norm!

I'll work on flow and airtime. Thanks

pure5152 wrote:that was GREAT!!

as for some constructive criticism, try to include more rotation in your quirk, that should help a lot xp

Oh I love rotation. Will work on that.

Sheldon wrote:The xy was the best. I know you can make better quirk though.

So do I.

Opal Rider wrote:I remember when you used to be just a bit better than me. I will catch up, though. I promise.

Stick to manuals and you'll be one of my heroes <3

Thanks for all the positive comments. Expect to see more manuals from me in the future.

The XY was just completley awesome

Helios Pavonine wrote:I personally thought the g-rolling was odd and didn't fit the track, but oh well.

I remember you calling that somewhat 'Future Quirk'

i'm agree wuth you, i love the xy part, quirks are awesome too