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HP - The Rude Awakening

Post by Helios Pavonine on Sun Nov 27, 2011 7:14 pm

*flashback*

I'm in my bed, thinking about quirk. No, no, NO! I don't want to become a wanderer in a world where the boundaries are in sight. I did not know that Fate had already decided. I closed my eyes. ''Tomorrow's another day.''

''You've been in suspension for 108 days.'' Wait, wut? I felt a mighty slap on my cheek. ''I normally don't slap people, but hey, you looked dead fo' sure mate!''. I opened my eyes... The sun. So there's light at... some other side after all. This strange man offered me his hand. Sure. Let's see where I am.



This was originally Eden's beginning, but I lost a part so I was like: [Censored] this, and here it is. My most crappy track.

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Post by efrazable on Sun Nov 27, 2011 7:19 pm

That was boss! I think the XY could have used more airtime, tbh. Loved the G-Rollin'!

I can tell that you're constantly going to be half a step ahead of me in quirk.

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Post by Cereal on Sun Nov 27, 2011 7:39 pm

XY was the best part, and the rest was... adequate. Very skilled quirky tricks, but the track lacked airtime and flow.

Your manuals could also use some work, but overall, your fling/alt fling skills are above the norm!

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Re: HP - The Rude Awakening

Post by Stallie on Sun Nov 27, 2011 9:01 pm

Dude, really, crappy, this was awesome, I thought the xy was the best part of the track, and that one g roll after the xy, that was pretty awesome, nice job. 8D
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Re: HP - The Rude Awakening

Post by Inukaza on Sun Nov 27, 2011 9:19 pm

I thought it was lovely.

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Post by rabid squirrel on Sun Nov 27, 2011 9:50 pm

Dude, not bad at all! Bit short, but excellent while it lasted.

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Re: HP - The Rude Awakening

Post by pure5152 on Sun Nov 27, 2011 9:51 pm

that was GREAT!!

as for some constructive criticism, try to include more rotation in your quirk, that should help a lot xp
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Post by linerage on Mon Nov 28, 2011 2:00 am

that was preetty good

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Post by Derpinator on Mon Nov 28, 2011 11:03 am

Rotation at 0:53 = Boss

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Re: HP - The Rude Awakening

Post by Sheldon on Mon Nov 28, 2011 5:40 pm

The xy was the best. I know you can make better quirk though.
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Post by bbshabob1 on Mon Nov 28, 2011 7:00 pm

smokin i loved it

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Post by Opal Rider on Mon Nov 28, 2011 7:24 pm

I remember when you used to be just a bit better than me. I will catch up, though. I promise. Wink

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Re: HP - The Rude Awakening

Post by Helios Pavonine on Tue Nov 29, 2011 10:58 am

@efrazable wrote:That was boss! I think the XY could have used more airtime, tbh. Loved the G-Rollin'!
I personally thought the g-rolling was odd and didn't fit the track, but oh well.

@Cereal wrote:XY was the best part, and the rest was... adequate. Very skilled quirky tricks, but the track lacked airtime and flow.

Your manuals could also use some work, but overall, your fling/alt fling skills are above the norm!

I'll work on flow and airtime. Thanks Smile

@pure5152 wrote:that was GREAT!!

as for some constructive criticism, try to include more rotation in your quirk, that should help a lot xp
Oh I love rotation. Will work on that.

@Sheldon wrote:The xy was the best. I know you can make better quirk though.
So do I.

@Opal Rider wrote:I remember when you used to be just a bit better than me. I will catch up, though. I promise. Wink
Stick to manuals and you'll be one of my heroes <3

Thanks for all the positive comments. Expect to see more manuals from me in the future.

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Post by Wolf_Spirit on Tue Nov 29, 2011 11:31 am

The XY was just completley awesome Very Happy

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Post by Derpinator on Tue Nov 29, 2011 11:52 am

@Helios Pavonine wrote:I personally thought the g-rolling was odd and didn't fit the track, but oh well.
I remember you calling that somewhat 'Future Quirk' Hehe

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Re: HP - The Rude Awakening

Post by SETH on Tue Nov 29, 2011 12:25 pm

i'm agree wuth you, i love the xy part, quirks are awesome too

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