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Smooth Eve by efrazable

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Post by efrazable Sun Oct 16, 2011 10:30 pm



Yeah, it's short, but it's supposed to be. I have this collab with ___ going on, and this is the first track in my series to be scened by... ONE OF YOU! *dun-dun-dun*
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Post by linerage Sun Oct 16, 2011 10:46 pm

Stall is quite awesome.
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Post by Helios Pavonine Mon Oct 17, 2011 8:17 am

That was enjoyable! Would be more impressive if it had more power. Nice job. Wink
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Post by bbshabob1 Mon Oct 17, 2011 11:37 am

im the first person to ask who this mystery person is
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Post by efrazable Mon Oct 17, 2011 11:41 am

linerage wrote:Stall is quite awesome.
@Linerage- Oyez. It
was some work.
Helios Pavonine wrote:That was enjoyable! Would be
more impressive if it had more power. Nice job. Wink

@HP The purpose was to be
kinda smooth, going off of Sheldon's manual part in CF, and a little bit
of Silk Road by Ram Tzu. Thanks for the positive
feedback!
bbshabob1 wrote:im the first person to ask who this mystery
person is
@bbshabob You won't know until January 2012. Smooth Eve by efrazable 173596


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Post by SETH Mon Oct 17, 2011 2:24 pm

nice! short but very fun to watch, the smooth curves and xy work good
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Post by pure5152 Mon Oct 17, 2011 4:35 pm

let me start off by saying that the track was most definitely not bled XD more like bleen. or gled. or ruen. or something like that

as for the track, really creative use of green lines! The track did get pretty repetitive though, as it mainly went downward oscillating from left to right over and over 'til it was stalled at the end (the track was pretty short overall).

Next time, work on your direction and your power. otherwise great job! Wink
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Post by CamQuartr Mon Oct 17, 2011 4:43 pm

I felt there was 2 things that you can greatly improve on

-Direction
-speed(or flow)

Its weird how it just went back and forth, and downward. Try to go in all different directions and such.

I felt the track was kinda slow. It would have been better if bosh was going a bit faster.

Just some things to keep in mind, nice job Very Happy

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Post by Opal Rider Mon Oct 17, 2011 5:31 pm

^^ seemed to be inspired by ram tzu's silk road, which pretty much did just that.
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Post by pure5152 Mon Oct 17, 2011 6:48 pm

^ not saying that Ram Tzu's track is the paragon of excellence here XD it had it's weaknesses
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Post by Sheldon Mon Oct 17, 2011 10:02 pm

Style
7/10
This track has style which is stolen from a few people. However, that one backward tumbling curve was pretty stylish. I have to give you props for that.
Control
6/10
Control was rather mediocre in my opinion. I have very high expectations for control in xy. The stall was very controlled though.
Skill
8/10
You seem to have more and more skill with each track that you release. The xy was much better than any I have seen from you so far.
Fun
9/10
This track was very fun. That one backward rolling curve was very fun, I was actually surprised when I first saw it.

Overall
7/10
I decided to go with 7 rather than 8 because of the length, which I know is intentional. The track had some pretty deceptive moments. Next time go for more movement and try to make a loop or two. Other than that you are improving a lot with each track. Keep up the good work. Smooth Eve by efrazable 232659


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Post by efrazable Mon Oct 17, 2011 10:06 pm

Sheldon wrote:Insert review here
A REVIEW! Smooth Eve by efrazable 992897

EDIT: Thanks, I was expecting about a 5 or so, seeing you give scruff a nine. But thanks! Means a lot from you.
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